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Here is my latest piece guys!
I know, I have been very inactive as of late...
Only one verse has been omitted from its original form.
I pray to Thee
"Listen O ` You to my prayers,
Take off the burden this heart bears,
As the time approaches, help me,
Set me free,
Make it all happen, I pray to Thee.
Despite the hurdles faced,
In You have all the hopes been placed,
Let not my words go to waste,
With Your Support has the negativity been erased,
Let not my determination be disgraced.
I know well the challenges exist,
I still believe You will assist,
My prayers have the power to resist.
I pray again what I pray before,
Make it all happen as I swore,
Let this bird-like heart reach the destination,
It flies with hope, in love and admiration."
Poem (written by Rawal Afzal) completed at 19: 47 PM CEST, 1st July 2013.
This picture fascinates me so much that it will now grace my avatar.
A laugh, revealing pearls,
A face beautiful as the moon,
Time is too narrow to contain them,
But my heart does so.
Wow, wow, wow! I am seriously impressed! This thread I don´t think has been graced with deeper words than these too often. The first verse kills it!
Khair tou hai na, bhai ji?
"A laugh, revealing pearls.... "
How I wish I had been the one to come up with this!
Years before my birth, the Almighty bestowed upon me a blessing on the 9th of February.
Well right, surgery number 13 in life awaits me this Friday. The orders are strict from 'someone' that I should be having nothing to do wth any female doctor or a nurse, and should simply mind my business. With the Help of the Divine, I expect myself to pull this one off as well - I wasn't called a person of strong will and great character by Ellyse Perry without a reason.
Anyways, the piece below was composed on the first day of year 2014 and its sole purpose was to motivate myself for the challenges ahead. It was inspired from a poem written in Hindi by the Bollywood actor Amitabh Bachchan`s father.
Walk in the sunshine
"You will not tire,
You shall not retire,
Wait not for the shadows, walk in the sunshine,
Let resistance be your only sign,
Others sleep in order to dream,
You must stay awake to fulfill each your dream,
Crawl to your goals, if you cannot walk,
Inspire others too with the way you talk.....
You are happy,.... at least you can pretend,
Await no helper, ask not for a friend,
Lead your life the way it has been penned,
Accept your limitations, them you can't transcend.
For the permanent does not have an end....
Disappointments will greet you,
But never allow them to defeat you,
Prepare with a smile well before they meet you,
They shall not be allowed to down you,
Live for those who are around you,
Sorrows may be be deeper than the oceans,
Yet you will not show your emotions....
Tough may seem your survival,
But every downfall has a revival,
You must resist, insists you Rawal... "
Completed at 11:03 AM CET, 1st January 2014.
Awesome as usual
but surgery no.13?
Are you trying to create some sort of record
I hope its a minor one and wish it is successful
Wow! great poem by Harivanshrai bachchan.
Take care Rawal.stay strong
Yaar Rawal...
Maza te sirf uddon aana see ....agar punjabi wich likhi hondi ....Angreezi che parhan da koi sawaad nai ..yaara
Limit of sadness Rawal bhai..you are surely able to stand with some renowned poets,you are second to none..I really laud your intelligence..brilliant!
A liberated soul
"My beliefs, my Theism,
More questionable than Atheism,
Irrational it sounds,
To believe in a God without bounds......
Humanity, the goal,
A liberated, yet accountable soul, 1
Fearing Him Who cures the ill, 2
I don't steal, I do not kill, 3
Yet I do not stone, being of those who sin, 4
The One, the Eternal, firm is my faith in Him, 5
His are the favours I can't deny, 6
He alone answers my cry,
Physically unreachable, spiritually so nigh."
Completed at 11:08 AM CEST,17th April 2014.
Footnotes:
1. Bhagavad Gita 2:20 (which I believe also establishes the accountibility of the soul given that death is not the end).
2. Qur´an 26:80.
3. Two of the Ten Commandments found in the Torah (Exodus 20:13, Deuteronomy 5:17).
4. "Let him who is without a sin cast the first stone" - Jesus Christ (as documented in John 8).
5. A part of it is found in Qur´an 112.
6. Qur´an 55:13.
I tried to dedicate some of my time to poetry and I wrote a poem about my country. As in all cases, I chose a topic on which I would like to write.
Hamara Pyara Watan - Pakistan
Ye Pakistan hai hamara watan,
hamari ankhoun ka tara watan,
hamara pyara watan!
Hawa mein darakhtoun ka woh jhomna,
woh pataoun ka pholoun ka mounh chomna,
hamara pyara watan!
Isi se hai hamari zindagi mein bahar,
hamein is se hai bohat sa pyar,
hamara pyara watan!
This is very good rawal I really like the references.
Nice one, kid! Sounded so like those mili naghmey played early in the morning on the Pakistan TV channels. Ah´ good old memories!
Nicely done I say! That "Isi" bit immediately reminded me of the ISI.
Wow, good job.
So much talent on Pakpassion.
Nice one, kid! Sounded so like those mili naghmey played early in the morning on the Pakistan TV channels. Ah´ good old memories!
Nicely done I say! That "Isi" bit immediately reminded me of the ISI.
I tried to dedicate some of my time to poetry and I wrote a poem about my country. As in all cases, I chose a topic on which I would like to write.
Hamara Pyara Watan - Pakistan
Ye Pakistan hai hamara watan,
hamari ankhoun ka tara watan,
hamara pyara watan!
Hawa mein darakhtoun ka woh jhomna,
woh pataoun ka pholoun ka mounh chomna,
hamara pyara watan!
Isi se hai hamari zindagi mein bahar,
hamein is se hai bohat sa pyar,
hamara pyara watan!
You've got some talent mate,really good stuff
Here is mine,I shared it on another threadRawal bhai knows
Hum dhoondtey hain apne maqsad-e-hayaat ko
Ghafiz hain apni hi zaat say
Phirte hain raat bhar kuch kho gaya to hai
Na jaane kya shay hai jis ko dhondtey hen hum
Another verse
Waqt chalta hai'dortey hain sub aagay ki taraf
Pechlay jo saathi thay onhe kon yaad rakhta hai
Another
Kya zamana aa raha hai kya qadr-o-qeemat hai insaan ki
Izzat ka meyaar ab to dolat sai tolten hai sub
We've got some talented poets. Wonderful stuff.
I wish I had it in me, but alas.
SpanksThanks.
They are very nice. Good stuff.
You may find my poetry earlier in this thread
Pity I barely write any more because of exams. Will start soon after exams again IA.
For me?
Don't tell me please,you're very talented,believe me
8/10.
1 mark deducted for the spelling mistake.
spelling mistake? which one?
For long we have slept without a care
It is time to awake, challenge and dare
We live in hope, die in despair
Not all things are beyond repair
There are demons in our minds we need to vanquish
The sooner we realize they will vanish
let's help ourselves and god's creations
To achieve something which will be remebered for generations
That's a really good poem, battler!
You forgot an "m" in remembered.
Brilliant!
Oh wait it isn't.
Here is mine,I shared it on another threadRawal bhai knows
Hum dhoondtey hain apne maqsad-e-hayaat ko
Ghafiz hain apni hi zaat say
Phirte hain raat bhar kuch kho gaya to hai
Na jaane kya shay hai jis ko dhondtey hen hum
Another verse
Waqt chalta hai'dortey hain sub aagay ki taraf
Pechlay jo saathi thay onhe kon yaad rakhta hai
Another
Kya zamana aa raha hai kya qadr-o-qeemat hai insaan ki
Izzat ka meyaar ab to dolat sai tolten hai sub
For long we have slept without a care
It is time to awake, challenge and dare
We live in hope, die in despair
Not all things are beyond repair
There are demons in our minds we need to vanquish
The sooner we realize they will vanish
let's help ourselves and god's creations
To achieve something which will be remembered for generations
This is amongst the best pieces that this thread has been graced with. All the verses are so consistent in quality that I can't even pick my favourite part.
Yes.
I am not good at poetry. :/
Really impressive Urdu poetry! I aim to be the first one to buy your book.
For long we have slept without a care
It is time to awake, challenge and dare
We live in hope, die in despair
Not all things are beyond repair
There are demons in our minds we need to vanquish
The sooner we realize they will vanish
let's help ourselves and god's creations
To achieve something which will be remembered for generations
Excellent work bro
Thanks cricket083 Ur poem was very good too , though din't understand a few urdu words
Thanks bro!
Ask me the words you don't understand..
There was a mistake in ghafil though I wrote ghafiz.
Yeah I don't know what is ghafil and maqsad e hayaat.
Maqsad means our mission/goal right? But what is hayaat?
Ghafil means regardless.
Maqsad-e-hayaat means purpose of life(hayaat means life)
Yeah I don't know what is ghafil and maqsad e hayaat.
Maqsad means our mission/goal right? But what is hayaat?
Ghafil means regardless.
Maqsad-e-hayaat means purpose of life(hayaat means life)
Thanks, Now I have understood ur full poem, it's very nice
Locked away from the rest of the world
In a dirty house that no one wishes to see
once glorious door, now covered in mud
once always open, now only few hold the key
But locked inside is gold and treasure.
All that you'll never get ouside these walls
The things you whine about all the time
but nothing is stoping you from finding the key
Loving and in need.
But a perverted outcast
from the eyes laid on the mud covered door
But if only you get hold of that simple yet magical key
And so what if I had all that I ever need
The qualities everyone claims they want to see
Lies and fabriction for others to feel sympathy
For no one is stopping them from using the key.
Thank you, friends!
Excellent! Very deep mind you. Had to concentrate for 10 minutes. Please tag me the next time you post a poem - I can´t afford to miss it.
Lastly, there are three typos in it.
I hope that your dream too comes true, a dream which is equally valuable to [MENTION=134963]96NotOut[/MENTION].That's very nice and deep Rawal bhai,I wish to write something like that when I'll meet JK
ghalat baat.
Thanks once again, guys.
I hope that your dream too comes true, a dream which is equally valuable to [MENTION=134963]96NotOut[/MENTION].
I have composed one covering my first love story as well, around about a year ago.
Don't wait!And,I am desperate to read that one also,please share.
Don't wait!
www.pakpassion.net/ppforum/showthre...ad-for-creative-people)&p=5718431#post5718431
[MENTION=132385]Afridi96[/MENTION] My first love story.
Thanks once again, guys.
I hope that your dream too comes true, a dream which is equally valuable to [MENTION=134963]96NotOut[/MENTION].
I have composed one covering my first love story as well, around about a year ago.
Look brother, I like you, love your poetry, but this shouldn't mean that I should ignore your weak English. In fact, correcting each other builds mutual understanding, friendship and tolerance. I have planned to make deliberate mistakes after marriage so that my wife has a chance to grab me by the ear and correct me all the time.
[MENTION=6745]DHONI183[/MENTION] [MENTION=135402]cricket083[/MENTION] [MENTION=134963]96NotOut[/MENTION] [MENTION=74419]Badsha[/MENTION] [MENTION=135578]Pakistani_Legend[/MENTION]
Hey bros, could you guys please give me any feedback or critique on my piece. I'm really enthusiastic about writing and looking to develop over the coming months.
Thanks.
Amazing How long does it take you to write these? And "It was a secret not known to many on PakPassion,Don't wait!
www.pakpassion.net/ppforum/showthre...ad-for-creative-people)&p=5718431#post5718431
[MENTION=132385]Afridi96[/MENTION] My first love story.